One Rainy Night, Midweek
Josie
offered him a lift to the station so he could drink if he wanted to. Just before he got out, she yanked
his tie sideways, downward, then more or less straightened it.
“Perfect,”
she said. “Go get her, tiger!”
Did
it go well?
They’d
recognised each other, from their online photos, remembered each other’s names
correctly. Stephanie, Steph,
either was fine with her. She
hadn’t been late. They’d both found the right clock to meet under. From there, it wasn’t far to a bar,
running, where he’d helped her off with her jacket and bought drinks.
“I’m
absolutely soaked!” she said with an embarrassed laugh, shaking her head so her
red hair flew out in a fan of water droplets. He wiped his face with the end of his tie.
“Sorry,
sorry!”
He waved
off her apologies and noticed that her blouse was wet, perhaps too obviously: she
slid her jacket off the back of her chair and back onto herself, muttering
about it being colder than she’d realised.
“I
could kill this,” he said, reaching for his beer. Froth slopped off the top and slid down the side of the
glass to pool on the table. He
looked around their surroundings, the copper finishes, brown faux-leathers,
beefy wallpaper, smoked glass lamp holders.
“Have
you ever been on a blind date before?” he asked, suddenly.
“Once. No, twice! The first didn’t turn up.”
“Maybe
they did, but didn’t like what they saw,” he said, instantly regretting it when
he saw her face, but not in time to stop his mouth running on with a quiet “and
went home.”
They
sat in silence for a moment.
“The
fool,” he added.
The
bar wasn’t busy, a few office workers, the barmaid reading a phone that lit her
face blue.
Eventually
he said, “You’re a school teacher, right?
Tell me about your day.”
She
did, and he nodded and made noises, but he hoped he wouldn’t have to answer
questions about any of it later. He
may have been opening and closing his legs without thinking because at one
point, while she was still talking, she reached under the table with a slightly
curious look and accidentally touched his knee.
“I’m
so sorry,” she said, colouring deeply from the opening of her blouse upwards.
He
laughed, it wasn’t that funny, and said “Don’t worry!” placing his own hand on
the knee she had closest to him.
“See!” She was wearing a
skirt, and he felt her skin against his palm. His hand still there, he touched around the bone with his
fingertips.
“And
you think that’s where it went wrong?” Josie asked.
He’d
called her on his way back. He
hadn’t wanted to interrupt her evening, but she’d said she was free now.
“I
think so,” he mumbled, running his thumb around the rim of his cup. She looked at him, and shook her
head. “Oh, my useless husband,”
she sighed. “We’ll get you having an
affair yet!”
by Nick Black
Amusing, fun, but still, an anecdote. You could develop this and make it amazing.
ReplyDeleteThis reads like a prequel to a compelling novel.
ReplyDeleteThank you both for your comments. Maybe this'll be the start of something....
ReplyDeleteClever. Perfect literary tension created by the “Maybe they did, but didn’t like what they saw,”. Like the others who commented, I would like to read more--chapter two and then some.
ReplyDelete(BTW, I am Jim Cunningham but I post under anonymous since I am too lazy to create an account)
Thanks for taking the time to comment, Jim (esp considering your laziness ; P )
ReplyDeleteI only meant this to be a bit of flash but it seems to have caught people's imagination more than I expected